In Week 6 of Term 1 our class focussed on how to write great explanations. We wrote about how to survive your first night in Mine Craft (the game a lot of us are obsessed with!).
Here is my writing, after I have self-assessed and peer-assessed my work.
Signs of Success!
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Self
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Peer
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Introduction - briefly tells the reader what the explanation is about
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Present tense
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Formal Language; Technical Language
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Time connectives
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Sequenced and paragraphed (paragraphs have 1 main idea!)
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Ambitious vocabulary (adjectives; verbs)
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Summary - may have an interesting fact or comment about playing the game
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Have you ever wondered how to play mine craft?
Then join in and play with me and lets go an a adventure.
As the sun rises on your first day your work is to...
Gather all the wood that you can find.
Sometimes you can use wood from trees.
There will also be chests to gather tools like torches lights fishing hooks and all sorts of thing to kill animals and eating them. How ever you can take your time but you are going to be killed by the zombies that spawn at night because it kill you.
Once you have all the equipment you need you start thinking where you want to place your house.
Have you found the right place to build your own house?
Firstly you need to check what you have on your table and chuck the equipment you don't need.
When you start building your house start from the bottom to the top and make sure you have a door so no animals will sneak in to house and die also make sure you have a bed especially at light.
When you think you have done start decorating your house with anything you have in your table.
I know there is cows, chickens, and all sorts of animals.
You have to kill then eat because you might die.
I know you are wondering why my life is going down?
It is just like humans. No one can't survive without food.
There it is you have completed your own home with the equipment that you have found.
I call it being creative with building houses.
You are done and don't die stay alive.
