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Friday, 5 June 2015

5/06/2015 MF speed write proof read: Sparkling star shinning upon us





Begin Writing Here:

[Title]
Sparkling star shining upon us!

[Introduction]
Do you ever wondered what are those sparkling, shining planets in the sky?
well, there are called stars, stars can shine every night!
Want to know more about stars well read along.

[Paragraph 1]
A life cycle of a star
Firstly a star is born in the dark hearts of the dark clouds in space.
Stars are born in a great clouds of hydrogen gas and dust called nebulae.
The chemicals in the stars are called carbon and oxygen.
( ONLY IN THE NIGHT TIME!!! )


Paragraph 2]
Types of stars
Stars are recognised easily because they are really bright and they are colorful.
There is a star called Red star super giant also a very hot mass called  white dwarf.
Did you know that stars make constellation in the sky? Then after a star explodes, its denses and shrunken core remains.
There are different types of stars like a proto and dwarf star.

[Paragraph 3]
Appearance
Stars are different colours and they are also different sizes, every star you see every night it is bigger and brighter than our sun. Many stars and the sun have spots on their surface which are the cooler areas.


[Conclusion]
There you go you have your own report on stars. I hope I gave you some information about stars and gave you a clue to write your own report but it might be for anything for example the nature and how they grow.
To find out more information about stars go to
http://science.nationalgeographic.com/science/space/universe/stars-article/



My Information Report Success Criteria:
Self
Peer
My heading/title:


  • is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)
yes

My opening paragraph/introduction:


  • says what my report is about in a clear way
Yes

  • gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification
yes

  • outlines the main features of the subject


My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:


  • have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)
yes

  • are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject
yes

  • give detailed information (factual descriptions)
yes

  • include specific, technical vocabulary
yes

  • are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)


  • may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information


My end paragraph/conclusion:


  • draws the report together/sums up my main points


  • may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found


3 comments:

  1. I really loved how you give a lot of effort and information in your work like there are different types of stars in the universe and that stars are constellations. Would you want to be a star shining brightly in the night?
    Thanks(WPS)Caroline

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    1. Hi Caroline,
      Thank you for commenting on my blog, maybe I can comment on your blog one day.
      I hope you have learnt so many facts about the stars.
      Yes, I would love to be a star shining brightly in the night sky.

      From
      Mary

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  2. Hi Mary,
    I like how you use paragraph in each sentences.
    From Cicilia

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