5/06/2015 MF speed write proof read: Sparkling star shinning upon us

Begin Writing Here:

[Title]

Sparkling star shining upon us!

[Introduction]

Do you ever wondered what are those sparkling, shining planets in the sky?

well, there are called stars, stars can shine every night!

Want to know more about stars well read along.

[Paragraph 1]

A life cycle of a star

Firstly a star is born in the dark hearts of the dark clouds in space.

Stars are born in a great clouds of hydrogen gas and dust called nebulae.

The chemicals in the stars are called carbon and oxygen.

( ONLY IN THE NIGHT TIME!!! )

Paragraph 2]

Types of stars

Stars are recognised easily because they are really bright and they are colorful.

There is a star called Red star super giant also a very hot mass called  white dwarf.

Did you know that stars make constellation in the sky? Then after a star explodes, its denses and shrunken core remains.

There are different types of stars like a proto and dwarf star.

[Paragraph 3]

Appearance

Stars are different colours and they are also different sizes, every star you see every night it is bigger and brighter than our sun. Many stars and the sun have spots on their surface which are the cooler areas.

[Conclusion]

There you go you have your own report on stars. I hope I gave you some information about stars and gave you a clue to write your own report but it might be for anything for example the nature and how they grow.

To find out more information about stars go to

http://science.nationalgeographic.com/science/space/universe/stars-article/

My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading/title:
is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)	yes
My opening paragraph/introduction:
says what my report is about in a clear way	Yes
gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification	yes
outlines the main features of the subject
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)	yes
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject	yes
give detailed information (factual descriptions)	yes
include specific, technical vocabulary	yes
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)
may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found

4/06/2015 Speedwrite: Sparkling star shining upon us.

[Heading/Title of Information Report]

Sparkling star shining upon us!

[Introduction]

Do you ever wondered what are those sparkling, shining planets in the sky?

well, there are called stars, stars can shine every night!

Want to know more about stars well read along.

[Paragraph 1 - change this to your first subheading]

A life cycle of a star

Firstly a star is born in the dark hearts of the dark clouds in space.

Stars are born in a great clouds of hydrogen gas and dust called nebulae.

The chemicals in the stars are called carbon and oxygen.

( ONLY IN THE NIGHT TIME!!! )

Paragraph 2 - change this to your second subheading]

Types of stars

Stars are recognised easily because they are really bright and they are colorful.

There is a star called Red star super giant also a very hot mass called  white dwarf.

Did you know that stars make constellation in the sky? Then after a star explodes, its denses and shrunken core remains.

There are different types of stars like a proto and dwarf star.

[Paragraph 3 - change this to your third subheading]

Appearance

Stars are different colours and they are also different sizes, every star you see every night it is bigger and brighter than our sun. Many stars and the sun have spots on their surface which are the cooler areas.

[Conclusion]

There you go you have your own report on stars. I hope I gave you some information about stars and gave you a clue to write your own report but it might be for anything for example the nature and how they grow.

To find out more information about stars go to

http://science.nationalgeographic.com/science/space/universe/stars-article/

My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading/title:
is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)	yes
My opening paragraph/introduction:
says what my report is about in a clear way	Yes
gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification	yes
outlines the main features of the subject
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)	yes
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject	yes
give detailed information (factual descriptions)	yes
include specific, technical vocabulary	yes
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)
may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found

The Mysterious appearances in the sky

Last week I have been working hard and communicating to get this Google slide finished.
This Google slide will tell you all about  the phases of the moon.

Why does the Moon looks different every night

In Week 6 of Term 2 our class focussed on how to write great explanations.

We wrote about the Moon’s different phases as we are in the middle of learning about Planet Earth and Beyond. Learning how to write a great explanation will help us with our self-guided topics in a few weeks time. Here is my writing, after I have self-assessed and peer-assessed my work.

INTRODUCTION

Why does the Moon appearance look different every night?

Well this explanation will tell you why it changes its appearance and also other fun facts that you maybe would want to find out about.

PARAGRAPH

The Moon's orbit is different from the other planets orbit.

Firstly the Moon only shines at  one side of the Moon because the sun reflects light only at one side of the Moon. When the Moon orbits the sun, the Moon has to catch up just by two days.

PARAGRAPH

The new moon looks like a ball that is all back that is round, a waxing crescent is like a banana but on the right side of the Moon. Waning gibbous is just like waxing gibbous but just on the other left side of the Moon, full moon is like a new Moon but you can see the whole Moon. First quarter is like a is like a half Moon but on the left side of the Moon, last quarter is like the opposite of the first quarter.

( This paragraph is not in order!!)

CONCLUSION

Finally,

Now that  you know the answer and more details by reading this explanation, I know that you can write your own.

If you need more information to write your own explanation here is a link that will help you get more information about the Moon's orbit around the earth.

http://astrosociety.org/edu/publications/tnl/12/12.html.

My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading:
is the question WHY DOES THE MOON LOOK DIFFERENT EVERY NIGHT?	yes	Yes
My opening paragraph/introduction:
introduce what my writing is about in a clear way	yes	Yes
hooks the reader	yes
clear topic sentence and supporting sentences	Yes
2-3 sentences maximum	yes	Yes
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
clear topic sentence and supporting sentences	yes
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject	yes	Yes
give detailed information (factual descriptions)	yes	Yes
include specific, technical vocabulary	yes
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)	yes
connectives and time connectives	yes	Yes
descriptive language	Yes
formal language	Yes
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points	yes	Yes
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found	yes
write an interesting fact	yes