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Thursday, 4 June 2015

4/06/2015 Speedwrite: Sparkling star shining upon us.



[Heading/Title of Information Report]
Sparkling star shining upon us!
[Introduction]
Do you ever wondered what are those sparkling, shining planets in the sky?
well, there are called stars, stars can shine every night!
Want to know more about stars well read along.
[Paragraph 1 - change this to your first subheading]
A life cycle of a star
Firstly a star is born in the dark hearts of the dark clouds in space.
Stars are born in a great clouds of hydrogen gas and dust called nebulae.
The chemicals in the stars are called carbon and oxygen.
( ONLY IN THE NIGHT TIME!!! )
Paragraph 2 - change this to your second subheading]
Types of stars
Stars are recognised easily because they are really bright and they are colorful.
There is a star called Red star super giant also a very hot mass called  white dwarf.
Did you know that stars make constellation in the sky? Then after a star explodes, its denses and shrunken core remains.
There are different types of stars like a proto and dwarf star.
[Paragraph 3 - change this to your third subheading]
Appearance
Stars are different colours and they are also different sizes, every star you see every night it is bigger and brighter than our sun. Many stars and the sun have spots on their surface which are the cooler areas.
[Conclusion]
There you go you have your own report on stars. I hope I gave you some information about stars and gave you a clue to write your own report but it might be for anything for example the nature and how they grow.
To find out more information about stars go to
My Information Report Success Criteria:
Self
Peer
My heading/title:


  • is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)
yes

My opening paragraph/introduction:


  • says what my report is about in a clear way
Yes

  • gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification
yes

  • outlines the main features of the subject


My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:


  • have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)
yes

  • are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject
yes

  • give detailed information (factual descriptions)
yes

  • include specific, technical vocabulary
yes

  • are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)


  • may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information


My end paragraph/conclusion:


  • draws the report together/sums up my main points


  • may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found



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1 comment:

  1. Anonymous5 June 2015 at 00:18

    Salut Mary,
    Well done on completing your speedwrite within the 40 minutes, you have included some great facts about stars.

    Your next learning steps are:
    1) Most of your information report was well written but you still need to proofread to further improve your work and make sure that your paragraphs make sense. I suggest you read your writing aloud and see which parts don't really make sense.
    2) Make sure that you use correct grammar when writing! There were quite a few grammatical errors that made the writing not 'flow'.

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